As part of my Editing minor capstone course, I wrote and edited numerous articles for an online religious magazine, Mormon Insights. Each article was intended to be a highlight of some longer, more scholarly source material. The purpose of the highlight was to give readers a taste of the source article and to direct them to the original publication.
The following is an article from that class. I helped this author mostly with substantive editing. The first draft appears above, followed by my comments, and then the final draft appears last.